Today, electronic products such as digital cameras, tablets, and cell phones have become cheaper and more popular. Companies that manufacture and sell these products are willing to design models that have additional functions. However, they do not know how to forecast the future choices of young people with regards to the type of functions that could be given in next-generation products. One way to determine this could be to analyze data obtained from social media sites, such as Facebook and Twitter.
Note the changes: The grammar was corrected at several places; for example, a series comma was inserted in the list, ‘digital cameras, tablets, and cell phones.’ The contraction ‘don’t’ was revised to ‘do not.’ The word ‘But’ at the start of the sentence was revised to ‘However.’ Certain word choices were improved; for example, ‘make’ was revised to ‘manufacture’ and ‘more and more’ to ‘additional.’ The ‘.etc’ was deleted from the last sentence, as it is inadvisable to use it in formal writing.
However, this paragraph has scope for further improvements.
